Kearsley West - Year 5 Blog
Goldfish boy I hope that your okay wIth you’re sickness of germs but I hope you get well soon.
That’s a nice message, but it’s not a character description?
Goldfish boy is my best book i have read i just cant wait to find out who has took Teddy but there is only little clues yet about Teddy going missing, but Matthew is not so confident about who has took Teddy. I cant wait to finish reading Goldfish boy but it is one of my best books i have read in primary school.
I’m glad you enjoyed the book – please can you write a few sentences describing the main character?
I enjoyed Goldfish boy, it was a really good book for children like us in Year 5 which we can read, (nursery can’t read) (maybe?) and there were twists mystery and fun, not for Teddy in the book.
We even saw that there’s a character called Matthew, like Matthew in our class or Matthew in Year 2!
I’m glad that you enjoyed our class text – please can you write a few sentences describing Matthew?
This book is amazing;amazing because it is a very good book. It is amazing like football.
I am glad that you found the book so praiseworthy. Please can you write a few sentences describing Matthew?
Matthew is a weird, weird because he hates germs a lot. The more he goes outside, the more anxious he becomes because of O.C.D.
Well done, you’ve used our AP sentences really well.
Can you think of another word for weird?
Matthew (AKA the person who is scared of germs) is scared of going outside.
Good use of brackets!
Can you think of another word for scared?
Matthew was petrified of going out side
Matthew is like a gold fish because he has O.C.D. Matthew is a strange boy: he needs to wash his hands a lot when he’s been outside.
Well done, I liked your description: detail sentence very much. Very well punctuated.
Why do they call Matthew goldfish boy?
Matthew is strange, strange because he is afraid of germs. The more he gets germs, the more afraid he is.
Much better use of description!
Can you think of another word for afraid?
Anxious another word for afraid
Goldfish boy’s hair is as gold as a coin and the more he goes outside the more he worries.
Good joining of a simile and the more the more!
Where could you have used a comma for clarity?
Matthew (AKA goldfish boy) is kind and has Obsessive Compulsive Disorder. Matthew is worried about Teddy – he almost forgets he has Obsessive Compulsive Disorder.
Good recall and use of brackets and dashes!
Can you think of another word for worried?
Mathew is a boy who has OCD and wants to solve a mystery where Teddy goes missing and leaves traces of blood on a blanket. He is tidy, tidy because he has OCD .He is strange, strange because he is trying to figure out where a missing boy is.
Well done, you’ve done more than the minimum and used different types of sentences.
Can you think of another word for strange?
The more germs he gets, the more afraid he gets.Matthew is weird, weird because he has got O.C.D.
Good use of exciting sentences.
Where should you have included an extra finger space?
Matthew is strange: strange because he stares out his window.
Good first sentence.
Please add at least one more sentence.
Matthew has OCD, it’s a disease. I hope you get well soon.
Good recall of the character.
Add a simile about Matthew.
Mathew is as clean as a fish.Mathew is a Goldfish boy (just an opinion) because off O.C.D. I liked that book because it’s mysterious.
Good use of similes and brackets!
Where should you have used an extra finger space?
Mathew is as clean as a fish. Mathew has OCD’s which is as bad as hurting your self.
In between the more the more and the semi colon.
Matthew (AKA the boy that looks out of the window at everyone) he is a kind loving boy who has OCD. By the way, it means obsessive compulsive disorder. Matthew is very concerned about his neighbor’s grandson who is called Teddy and Teddy’s sister is called Casey and she doesn’t even care that his younger brother has gone missing. Matthew thinks his dad doesn’t care about him: he always looks out of the window and he always gets distracted about the germs in his home when ever someone goes in his room.
Well done, you’ve done a very good description with different sentence types.
Which conjunction have you used too much?
I have used and to much.
Mathew Corbyn is a odd boy, odd because he spends most of his time inside. Mathew (AKA goldfish boy) has O.C.D and he hates germs.
Well done, you’ve done some good descriptive sentences!
Where have you used ‘a’ when you should have used ‘an’?
Matthew is kind, lovely and always try to achieve his goals. Matthew (AKA a clean person ) has O.C.D.
Matthew (AKA weird) is frightened of germs sat in his room.
The more Matthew saw germs, the more anxiety he gained.
Good use of brackets and synonyms for scared.
You are supposed to put it after outside.
Mathew is a weard person: weard because he has OCD so he will not step outside and he spends most of his time inside.
Well done, you’ve tried to use a colon well!
What word have you spelled wrong?
In the morning, Mathew wakes up to a bright sunlight from his window to find out if there are germs on his window , he really hates germs because of his OCD.
Melody ,who is one of Mathew’s friends, visits the graveyard to look at all the pretty statues.
Mathew,who suspects Melody for Teddy’s disappearance, cleans a lot to get rid of all the germs that might be crawling all over things.
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