Kearsley West - Year 4 Blog
The big, brown bear was sat on the bright, green grass,carrying his cute, little baby on his back.
Excellent use of alliteration and adjectives!
W – Can you think of a better word for little?
The sneaky skunk with a stripy tail slyly watching the other animals.
Excellent adverb (slyly) and use of expanded noun phrases
W – What suffix could you add to the verb watch to could you replace ‘watching’ with, so that your sentences makes more sense. (Clue: -ed or -est?)
The big round hive was buzzing loudly up in the big brown and green tree.
Excellent use of adjectives, adverbs and prepositions.
W – Can you think of a better word for ‘big’.
The fluffy blue bird is flying through the forest, above the very long tree.
Excellent use of expanded noun phrases and prepositional phrase.
W – Can you think of a better verb than ‘flying’?
The brown, feathered owl with huge eyes was sat on the tall tree.
Excellent use of expanded noun phrases and prepositions!
W – Can you put an adverb before the verb ‘sat’ to up-level your sentence? (Clue: a word ending in -ly.)
The brown, little animal crawling on the trees with a white stripe in the middle of the animal with small eyes and a little nose.
Wonderful range of adjectives!
W – What animal were you talking about?
It was the squirrel on the tree with brown fur and a white patch in the middle of the animal.
The big brown grisly bear, with his big teeth and massive paws was very scary.
Fantastic use of adjectives and prepositions!
W – Can you think of a better adjective than ‘big’?
The family of green turtles, stood together on the green grass by the river.
Great use of an expanded noun phrase!
W – Can you add another adjective to the phrase ‘green grass’ so that it becomes a 2A?
The black & white fluffy animal with a stinky body .
Great adjectives and preposition!
W – Can you extend your sentence so that it is a complete sentence and not just an expanded noun phrase? (Clue: add a verb phrase – what was the animal doing, e.g. standing, sitting, walking etc.)
My animal: Light green and dark green. It moves slowly. It has a hard shell.
Excellent use of 2A sentences!
W – Can you join your ideas into one sentence with an expanded noun phrase?
The light and green bird with soft feathers moved slowly.
Hi Ben I got your letter to greenbank! 🙂
The brown fluffy owl with big round eyes was in the big brown tree, he was very old and wise.
Excellent use of additional phrases to up-level your sentence!
W – What punctuation could you have used to separate your adjectives? (Clue: a full stop, an exclamation mark, parentheses, a question mark or a comma.)
The big brown deer stood proudly with its huge blue eyes on a gorgeous sunny day.
Amazing range of adjectives, adverbs and prepositions.
Look in the right top corner: orange claws and grey and orange fur.
W – Can you write an expanded noun phrase about the animal?
The animal in the bottom left corn with orange claws and grey fur.
There is a grey, fluffy bird with lovely orange claws.
The black and white skunk, with a big bushy tail, watched the silly otters playing in the river.
A brown animal with big , yellow claws sat on a branch of a tree in the top right corner
Great use of adjectives and prepositional phrases!
The cheeky , baby turtle is peeking behind his protective mother as they walk slowly along the river bank.
Wonderful sentence with lots of amazing features!
W – Can you add an adverb into your sentence to make it even better?
The big, fluffy deer was sat on the green, shiny grass sunbathing.
Excellent use of 2A and commas!
W – Can you add an adverb into your sentence to up-level it further? (Clue: slowly, lazily, quickly, quietly, silently.)
The big, fat turtle was sat on the spiky grass protecting it’s babies.
Excellent expanded noun phrases and extension of your sentence! Well done!
W – Can you spot where you’ve used a contraction incorrectly? (Clue – a contraction is two words joined together by an apostrophe, e.g. you’ve.)
The cute, little dear with a fluffy white tail leaped over the sparkling, blue river.
Hi Year 4! This is Greenbank Primary School leaving you a comment on your blog!
Maple and Birch
Thank you very much for commenting. You’re sentence is great, well done and thank you for posting!
Hello I don’t go to this school but I would like to write a sentence
The silly, majestic ducks flew above the forest 🙂
Fantastic expanded noun phrase! Well done Parishe – it’s lovely to see one of our friends from Greenbank posting on our blog!
The other word for big is huge.
Swiftly, the big brown deer was looking for the river.
The bees are buzzing next to there nest. The foxes are looking at the water and ready to drink it.
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